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Style Response
Section 1
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The first section of the Style text by Joseph Williams illustrates the importance of clarity in writing. Throughout the section Williams gives examples of unclear writings in multiple professions such as lawyers, Politian’s, doctors, etc. Williams also gives reasons for unclear writings. The first lesson, to my belief, is to understand the potential problems with an unclear writing so therefore, the individual may see what he or she is doing wrong and correct the counterproductive common mistakes. One of the main lessons in the chapter is the importance of putting yourself before others in any form of writing.
According to Joseph Williams there are multiple reasons for unclear writings such as; unclear in the writer’s subject matter, over-stressing punctuation errors, and over contemplating readers’ views on a paper. Williams also gives specific examples of professionals using incorrect writing styles due to the over contemplating towards his or her career, in one example Williams points out that doctors will use large and complicated sentences to sound more knowledgeable in their profession. In the section, it is explained that such a method is not needed and can often be counterproductive. Williams explains that a well defined writer will convey their thoughts in a manner understandable to the reader.
I believe that each statement in the first section to be very true and are very important tools that one must use in writing a well defined paper. My favorite statement in the lesson is that, in order to write a productive paper, we must first be able to connect with the reader. There are many audiences that one must connect with in order to express his or her ideas clearly. I believe that this is a prime explanation of ‘reading between the lines.’ In many novels or illustrations there are many underlying deep message that are present. However, if the reader misses an underlying message in the novel the individual is still able to follow the plot of the reading. To become a great writer one must first greatly understand his or her subject in order to clearly connect with the individual(s) he or she is trying to relate to.
Section 3
In the third lesson of the style handbook, Joseph Williams exemplifies the significance of a well-stated sentence. While showing examples of correct and incorrect sentences, the reader learns three main characteristics that are needed to write a compound and complete sentence. First, we need to make the main character a subject, second we need to make important actions into verbs, and third we need to diagnose, analyze, and rewrite. Williams further explains this formula in a quotation by William Shakespeare, “Suit the action to the word, the word to the action.”
In the third lesson of the Style handbook, Williams conveys his thoughts clearly on the subject of comprehensible sentence structures. Williams uses many examples of how a clear sentence can have a large factor on the thoughts the writer is trying to convey. In one example Williams shows the reader the difference of word changing can make in a sentence, “We request that you review the data” and “Our request is that you do a review of the data.” These two sentences differ due to the fact that the author is putting the verbs into action and implying the character as a subject. As you diagnose, analyze and rewrite the sentence we are shown that our thoughts become more thought provoking and understandable.
At first the lesson was difficult for me to understand. I never realized that word structure could be a significant element in a sentence. The examples made a substantial impact on my understanding. As I read the lesson a few times I was able to comprehend the points Williams was trying to get across. In future writing I will try to use the tools and instruments taught to me in the lesson to better coagulate my ideas and thoughts.
Section 5
--In this response, you seem to write 2 paragraphs of Summary, and no analysis. The second paragraph should take some issue of the text, and deem it successful or not, with some sort of support for that claim. It shouldn't simply "explain".--
In Lesson 5 of the Joseph Williams Style handbook, Williams explains the importance of being cohesive and coherent. Williams follows up each definition with numerous examples and reasons why the definitions are significant. Williams also uses information used in previous lessons to help the reader further develop his or her skills.
While writing, it is important for the author to connect to the reader(s) in a cohesive and coherent manor. Cohesion is described to the reader in a metaphoric quote described by Williams, “think of cohesion as pairs of a sentence fitting together the way of pieces of a jigsaw puzzle do.” To be cohesive the author must use the information used in previous sentences and relate them to the next sentence. Coherency is similar to cohesion in that the pieces of the puzzle must also add up to a larger picture. To be coherent the author must sum up the information in a given paragraph or writing and relate it to the previous text. The subject of a sentence must state the main topic of the paper. Williams concludes the lesson by reinstating the three main rules of writing; diagnose, analyze, and rewrite.
I believe that being cohesive and coherent is important in all forms of writing. I enjoyed William’s explanation on using the subject of a sentence in relation to the main topic. I feel as if a sentence is not cohesive and coherent the text is often difficult to read and comprehend. I further understand the concept of both definitions. In future writing I will try to infiltrate the ideas and methods explained to by Williams in the 5th lesson of the Style handbook.
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section 7
The issue of concision is the main topic of the 7th lesson in the "Styly" handbook. In this lesson William's focuses on enlighing the reader of being usefull with their words and to avoid phrases with redundant or negative meanings. once again, Wesch uses numerous examples and reasons in order to further explain his point of views.
In order to successfully write with concision, the author should avoid grouping words with similar meanings. Such phrases might include, "final outcome", "true facts", and "large in size". The phrase "large in size" is similar due to the fact that large and size both describe similar comparisons. Williams also states that in order to write with concision the author should avoid negative phrases such as, not and cant. Instead of writing with negative adjectives, the author should take an positive and encouraging outlook on the subject he or she is trying to express. In this way the reader feels good about what he or she is reading.
I related to the 7th lesson of the "Style" handbook more then any other lesson i have read thus far. I commonly group phrases with similar meanings. I will try to correct myself, when i see myself writing in such ways. I could relate to writing in a positive tone since, i usually try to be optimistic in my writings. I believe that a paper should prove a point. In order to prove a point i also believe that the paper should have encouraging phrases throughout the writing. I will take the points presented in the 7th chapter with great consideration.
--Some proofreading issues, and it still seems like you're summarizing for two paragraphs, rather than picking something Williams is successful/unsuccessful at, and looking at it closely.--
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