Paul's Style Response 3

From Mizzou Wiki

The chapter begins with a discussion of coherence. Cohesion in writing depends on how words are arranged in sentences and how sentences are arranged in paragraphs. Sentences are more cohesive when the last few words of one contain information from the first few words of the next. When sentences are cohesive, reading them gives a sense of flow. Two principles are introduced: sentences should begin with information readers are familiar with; and sentences should end with information they can’t predict. Principles of clarity and cohesiveness should be balanced in writing, but cohesion should be given higher priority. Most sentences should start with a subject and the subject should be the topic of the sentence. Coherence is when the sentences in a paragraph are related and talk about one thing. If a sentence has many words before its subject, you should revise it so that the subject appears earlier. Writing appears clearer to readers when the topic of a sentence is its grammatical subject.

The author does a good job explaining principles of writing cohesively in a clear and easy to understand way. Like chapter three, the author uses many examples to demonstrate the principles he is talking about. Williams spends most of the chapter talking about cohesion, which seems unnecessary because he explains how to write cohesively early in the chapter. The Here’s the Point boxes are probably the most important part of the chapter because the clearly state what you should try to do in your writing.

I had never really thought about coherence when writing before. Paragraphs should obviously make sense, but I never thought of it has something as concrete as coherence. I try to write cohesively and I think some of the ways of doing it he mentions will be helpful in the future. I think this chapter was better than the third chapter, which used so many examples that some of the points he tried to make were difficult to figure out.

--the first sentence here doesn't really have cohesion with the second. I think you may have just used the wrong term though...