Myron Style Response
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1st style response.
The first chapter talks about two principle, that’s it’s good to write clearly, and anyone can. It starts off talking about how people writings and be difficult to read. If they just put it in simple terms then there readers will be able to understand it. Then it got in to different authors and the different writing style. It also said that even when readers can’t understand writing, most of the time the person that wrote it doesn’t understand all of it either. It said that when most people write complicated sentence they are trying to indicate deep thinking when sometimes that isn’t true. One of the last things the chapter talked about was that when you are rewriting your paper don’t only think about if it sounds good and looks good to you. But that your audience can understand it also. I fell that he was able to analyze his argument well.
Joseph Williams was able to argue his point because he had different quotes from different authors. He was able to use what they had written to explain what he meant. He explained things clearly. Also had examples in the chapter that showed the difference and how he was trying to explain the chapter. The he had different languages and told how they helped his argument. But the chapter was easy to understand and everything seem to relate to something I have read or written.
Well I feel that most of the things that were in the chapter are true. When writing a paper I tend to think about myself. I rarely think about my audience when rewriting it because I’m just making sure that it sounds good to me. But I have read peoples writing sometimes wondered what this or that meant, and when asking them they did fully know because they were trying to write more than they knew. Or they were trying to impress someone so they thought with the difficult sentence that they were doing that. But overall the chapter was able to help me with some of my writing skills.
--some sentence level issues here, but the content is about right. Make sure that you're proofreading your work for grammatical issues, but overall structure looks good.
2nd Style Response
The third chapter was about action and how simple actions are able to separate two of same sentences. When reading the chapter you were able to see how a writer can make his sentence hard to read just by having a few words in the wrong place. But with a few subject changes and a few action added to the sentence you were able to make your point clearer. It talked about one way to make your reader benefit from your writings is to use more verbs, or you could nominalize your words. When doing that you made your sentence more concise, the sentences become clearer. It told that using subject, action, and verbs not only explain why readers judge your prose but also helps you revise your sentences that readers think are wordy and dense.
In the chapter he was able to make the argument that you could use words that you didn't like and that you did like and distinguish two sentences. He was able to use common sentences and show how the first sentence was too dense and complex. But then with a second sentence he used different verbs that matched the paragraph and made it clearer. He showed how to the reader might think a sentence is unclear because it was hard to read through. Then with a simple change of words that same sentence that was told to be unclear is now clear. When looking at your writing you see that with a couple of spell changes or moving words around it sounds clearer to the reader. When you are able to replace subject and verbs in your paper that’s helping the reader understand it more. In chapter three he was able to show that, with different examples. He went from sentence to sentence, paragraph to paragraph explaining and showing how with a couple of changes the sentence went from barely understanding it to completely understanding it and being able to talk about it.
When I was first reading the chapter I wasn't able to understand it completely. I wasn’t able to comprehend what he was doing with the two sentences. But as I was looking at the example it really help me out. The two showed how some one can help their paper just with a couple of action words. There were parts of the chapter that really had me thinking about what was being said. He was able to help write a better sentence just by using different characters. When using different character it made the sentence way better. It made you look at the first sentence and say why didn’t it just say that. But that was the point to show that with a little action or verb everything seems easier.
3rd style response
The fifth chapter talks about cohesion and coherence how to make your sentence flow to help the reader understand it and know it as a whole. The chapter had different examples that made it easy to tell what cohesion and coherence were. It explained that cohesive is when you able to have words from one sentence flow into another one to make it make sense. Then it said that coherence is seeing all of the sentences are to adding up too. The chapter also talked about diagnosis and revision it talked about how readers get the information and that there were two sources of doing so. First they remember words from sentences they just read and second they bring a general knowledge of it content. It also talked about subject, topic, grammar and how to begin your sentence well.
When looking at the chapter you get a sense of what the author is talking about. He makes these sentences so that he can get his point across. Every example might sound good the first time you read it but when he shows you the second example it just flow. That’s how I was able to look at the writing and know what cohesion and coherence meant because of his examples. He does a good job of explaining the difference of the two when he uses the jigsaw puzzle for an example. Once he starts talking about revision and how to make the beginning your sentence let the reader know what to come it helps his argument a lot. The author doesn't just leave you with one example and one paragraph and that’s it, he gives your more. He gives you so many examples that you are forced to the different between the two.
Before reading the chapter I had a sense of what cohesion and coherence was. I had heard the two words before and I had talked about them but I have never seen anything like I just read. The chapter was so helpful because when reading it I was learning at the same time. I was getting a feel of the content and what the author was trying to say. I was able to read two examples and buy the time the third one came around I was able to point out the different of it. It’s so helpful because, to me the way for me to understand this kind of writing is with examples and plenty of them and that what the author did.
--good content in this response, but it would read easier if you proofread for spelling and grammar, etc.
4th style response
The seventh chapter starts talks about concision. The chapter starts off talking about clarity, grace, and concision. It tells how you get close to clarity when you match you characters and actions to you subjects and verbs. Then it talks about diagnosis and revision it tell that that there are six principles to concision. When you’re editing a sentence, using those six principles can help. Also in the chapter it talks about deleting meaningless words. It gave good examples to show how when you're typing a paper you may use two different words but they both of them mean the same thing.
--the bold sentences need to be more concise, like the chapter's guidelines. The first two sentences deal with exactly the same thing.--
The chapters made the argument that sometimes you type things that are the same but you don’t know it. It was able to make good point when telling how sometimes you put too much in a sentence to explain what you are trying to say. At one point the chapter gives so many examples of replacing a phrase with a word that you have no choice but to understand what the author is trying to say. The chapter back up its arguments and showed the difference between good sentences and bad sentences.
To me the chapter was very helpful (when?) looking at a paper. It talked about some of the things that i do when writing a paper. There were good examples in the chapter that was able to help me understand what was being said. I understand what the author meant when explaining certain subjects because of his good examples. I will try to use the 6 principles to revise my paper. The chapter was also able to help me distinguish what the difference when trying to put together a good sentence.
Good coverage. Now pay closer attention to Style--
5th style response
The tenth chapter was talking about readers and writers and was very informational. It told me about how it's just not the writer’s job to write clearly. But the readers job also to read closely enough to understand the ideas that are required. The chapter had arguments that you were able to notice. It talked about how sometimes a writer might write difficult on purpose. For this reason is to make the reader not understand what is being written. If there trying to get a point across and they want the reader to know but don’t want them to know them might right in a difficult content.
The main argument of the chapter to me was that everything isn’t what it appears to be. The author was able to put different example in the chapter to state what a writer might do to confuse the reader. The chapter had one example wear a gas company was writing to its customers telling them why they had to raise their rates. After going over what the company had wrote the author pointed out that the company was trying to put the blame on someone else. When the author rewrote it he showed how they were stirring away from the fact that they didn’t have to raise the rates. But since this act had been put in that they could raise their rates.
I feel that the chapter was a well writing chapter. That the chatter put its argument out on the table and then was able to back them up with good examples. It showed and told me how sometimes writers can try to manipulate their rehears. How sometimes a writer will try to make the reader not worry about the problem in the letter by writing it difficult. Or writing it to wear the reader will look at it and not even worry about what is being said because they feel like it not writing to them. I also feel that the author did a good job showing how it’s not just about the writer. That it’s also about the reader and how they have some blame on what is being wrote. If the reader can’t understand the ideas of what is being wrote then they might think that is a bad paper. But overall I was able to understand the chapter and learn things from it.
